Learn English – The use of ‘because although’ in the middle of a sentence

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I was just wondering if it is okay to use "because although" in the middle of a sentence. How does this sentence look? Should I remove the comma after self-confidence or any other suggestions?

It is important to have a more detailed understanding of the social factors that hinder adolescents' self-confidence, because although the life stage is short in comparison to childhood, the bullying experienced by teenagers during this crucial stage of development has been identified as being particularly damaging.

I can see the argument for splitting this into two separate sentences, but I really need to link them together with the use of "as" or "because" somehow.

Best Answer

While I don't believe this is technically incorrect, it does sound clunky.

What about removing the "Although" and reworking the remaining sentence to account for the same meaning?

"It is important to have a more detailed understanding of the social factors that hinder adolescents' self-confidence, because the adolescent life stage is short in comparison to childhood, which makes bullying experienced by teenagers during this crucial stage of development, particularly damaging."

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