In military contexts you often see sentences like this one:
"General Montgomery decided to…"
I am now writing an evaluation about a sale my company had had, and I want to credit several people while quickly mentioning their role in the operation. So, is this…
"We sent an email to Store Manager Kenneth Johansson in order to…"
…or that…
"Thanks to Booking Coordinator Elin Dansbo's work we were able to…"
…readable and grammatically correct, or should I instead put their position in parenthesis after their name, or use some other kind of structure?
Best Answer
As bib said, it is very unusual to refer to someone by their title directly. You can do it, and it is quite common in political and military organizations, but rarely ever done in private business enterprises.
To get around this, try the following construct:
"We sent an email to our store manager, Kenneth Johansson, in order to..."
This form of addressing someone's role in a company, as a posessive, is quite common in American Engilsh construction. It can even be used if the employee is not a part of the company, and instead only contracted by the company. It can even be used if you have a partner in business, by referring to them as "Our partner company x".