Across the Chesapeake Bay from the rest of the state Maryland's Eastern Shore lies there , whose farms produce beans, tomatoes, and other garden vegetables.
Is this sentence grammatically correct? How is it stylistically?
My teachers has already said to me that the adverb there should be removed.
However, I have forgotten the reason for it. Could you help me why this sentence is not correct?
Best Answer
An idiomatically correct rendering of that sentence would be:
"There" and "[a]cross the Chesapeake Bay from the rest of the state" refer to the same thing, so a sentence that permits the word "there" to appear where you have it would also permit this bit of silliness:
It would be possible to say
...but then you would lose the ability to tag on the "whose farms produce beans, tomatoes, and other garden vegetables" part. "Whose", in that case, would refer to "the rest of the state" rather than to the Eastern Shore. That's one of the drawbacks of an essentially case-free language (English has only a vestigial genitive and some accusative — and one dative/ablative — pronouns). Word order matters a lot.
It is also possible to arrange the sentence into a topic/comment structure:
It is typical in a topic/comment sentence to mention the subject twice: once as an elaborated phrase (or an object pronoun) and again as a pronoun. English is not a topic-prominent language (as, say, French tends to be), but topic/comment is neither unheard of nor particularly uncommon.
Fronting the location clause ("across the Chesapeake Bay from the rest of the state") means that you have to move the verb "lies" as well, or you will be stuck with a construction that has an archaic or poetically pretentious tone to modern ears, though it may have been acceptable or even normal in Sixteenth or Seventeenth Century English. (At that time, the standard dialect of English had not yet completely transitioned away from the Germanic word order of Old English. Standard dialects of written languages tend to change slowly over time compared to the actual language as used on the ground by its speakers, but they do change. "Posting" verbs is rare in modern English, and mostly found in idiomatic utterances.)