Learn English – use an ellipsis before a comma

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On a particular piece of dialogue and I wasn't sure if this was correct or just a matter of style.

"[…] your shield, you don’t deserve…, nor how can I put into the line?”

My question is the use of ellipsis in quotes, here 'you don't deserve' is its own clause, is it ok to use the "…" to denote an additional pause, or should I just stick with the comma?

Edit: There is more preceding your shield, I just kept it short for brevity sake.

Best Answer

No, you should not put a comma after an ellipsis. Use either the ellipsis by itself or the comma by itself. Wikipedia has an example of an ellipsis immediately followed by a comma, but this is abnormal in the context of writing dialogue. It would not contribute to a natural feel.

Also, you don't deserve isn't its own clause, it is you don't deserve your shield (one clause) rearranged into your shield you don't deserve. No comma. Edit: I'll let this drop, since the example lacks sufficient context to determine the form of the sentence.

I can't comment very well on the second part of the verse, since I don't know what it means or how it relates to the first part. All I can say is that assuming the second part does make sense, the following is a better option:

[...] your shield, you don’t deserve... nor how can I put into the line?